雅思大作文范文——教育类
2021-04-09 环球教育
题目
In recent years,pressure of students in schools and universities is increasing and they are pushed to work hard from a young age.Do you think it is a positive or negative development?(20170819)
范文
The pressure the students are under has always attracted a large amount of attention of the public,Usually,students are forced to reach thelr limit both physically and mentally from an early age.From my point of view,this educational concept is far worse than we had initially expected.
On the one hand,an appropriate amount of pressure could better prepare modem college students to face the realities of their future career.To be more specic,college students are more likely to be self-motivated and stimulated to achieve academic excellence,or they may struggle to find employment after graduation,Under such mental strain,students are eager to leam and actively participate in more activities to further sharpen their social skills,which means that this higher education system will contribute more brilliant graduates to the labour market.
However,such pressure at an early stage of study such as primary education,can cause unforeseen consequences.The most significant of which is that natural instincts and talents of young pupils or secondary school students can be systematically neglected.For example,in some countries primary school students are forced to study extremely hard,finishing a huge amount of homework and going to tutoring schools at night and weekends.
Consequently,these arrangements unrelentingly kill the learning interest and creativity of the young making it nearly impossible for them to pursue their real passion or discover their true talent.
Overall,the approach of forcing students to study under a great amount of pressure from their first day of learning is fundamentally incorrect.As far as I am concerned,I strongly believe that such educational practice is definitely a negative development.
学生的压力题一直以来引起了公众的广泛关注。通常,学生们在年幼的时候就械迫发挥自己的身心吸限。在我看来,这种教育理念比我们最初想象的要糟糕得多。
一方面,对于当代的大学生来说,适当的学习压力有助于他们面对将来的就业现实。具体来说,大学生们更有可能自我励以使自己学业有成,否则在毕业时将很难找到工作。在这种精神压力下,学生们会如饥似地学习,积极参加更多的活动来锻炼他们的社交技能,这就味着这种高等教育体系可以向人才市场输送更多的优秀毕业生。
但是,在早期的学习阶段,如小学时期,就承受这样的压力可能会对孩子造成难以预料的影响。最严重的影响就是中小学生的天性和天赋可能会被系统性地忽视。例如,在一些国家,小学生迫拼命学习,完成大量的作业,并且晚上和周末还要上辅导班。结果,这做法无情地扼杀了孩子们的学习兴题和创造力,使得他们几乎无法再追求自己真正的爱好或发现自己的天赋。
总的来说,让孩子在学习之初就处在巨大的压力之下的教育理念是完全错误的。在我看来,我坚信这种教育手段带来的绝对是负面的影响。
教师点评
考生在借鉴这篇文章的时候,可以注意其段落及句子之间的连接。此外,一些副词的应用,尤其是用来修饰谓语动词和非谓语动词的副词,用得也非常准确。
本文按年龄划分学生群体,以此作为切入点展开论述。主一段先论述生的压力,随后在主二段再论述中小学生的压力,如此一来便非常直接地回应了题干中的students in schools and universities"。文尾清断地表明了自己的立场,紧密扣题。
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