In the contemporary society,the topic of environmental protection often hits the headlines. For this, there has already been a discussion regarding who should take responsibility of conserving environment well .
Some people hold the idea that just every person should and have the ability to approach the pollution of the environment.They think that if everyone reduces the pollution to the environment,the sum of the efforts of the whole population in the world is huge.Thus we all should make efforts to deal with the environmental pollution.
As a coin always has two sides, others argue that firms,
governments as well as people need to take part in the process of the protection.Since the capability and the sense of individuals are both limited,some organizations must become the foremost leader to handle with the issue.Undoubtedly,the government in every country is the best candidate,as a result of the subtle and inseparable connection with each other.What is more,with the development of the globalization,
multinational corporations are growing bigger and bigger. So companies gradually get a closer connection under the commercial need.Hence, governments and companies besides people should unify together to address the environmental issue.有一些短语写的没到点儿上--打的是擦边球嘛，意思写的云里雾里--还是希望你能多多看看积累素材---才能写的很明白--很native.
In my opinion, the latter point does make sense. Earth is the only common home to the human, and thereforethere is no time to delay to protect it. Thus,everyone has the responsibility and liability to deal with the pollution, and governments should lead companies and people to approach the issue.
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Some people think that individuals have the ability to address environmental pollution issues, while others think that besides people companies and governments also should participate in the course of environmental protection. Discuss both views and give your opinion.( 社会类—环境保护) ```` The opposite: individuals have the ability to address environmental pollution issues sub-point1: take public transportation like bus or subway rather than drive private cars-----reduce the emission of green-house gases like CO2 ---make contributions to the protection of environment. sub-point 2: call on family members and friends to plant trees and clean up parks---reduce the effects of existing pollutants on ecosystems-----protect environment well. Theme: companies and governments also should participate in the course of environmental protection. sub-point 1: (companies) participate in the course of environmental protection----- allocate sufficient money to those urgent fields and spend a lot on the development of environment-protection technologies-------protect and improve the environment better (这些通常都是个人和政府做不到的) sub-point 2: (governments)enact and implement serious laws----punish and deter environmental pollution makers----avoid serious pollution issues (这些通常都是个人和政府做不到的) E.G.-------put lots of environmental damagers into prison. 环保参与者思路汇总： 人：生活方式—environmentally friendly lifestyles---(garbage classification; transport ways/modes—taking public transportation, such as bus or subway instead of driving private cars; consume less meat; NEVER purchase unrecyclable products—throw-off cups &plastic bags) Call on friends and family members to plant a tree& clean up parks Press governments and companies—demonstrations 公司： 钱 allocate/devote much money to environment protection organizations 技术take advantage of bio-fuels, such as ethanol ;renewable energy sources like wind energy, solar energy and tide energy. cut emission of carbon dioxide,SO2;sulphur dioxide. Get rid of low-efficiency and high-energy consumption facilities. 压力 pressure---``````````````````` 政府： 威逼：enact a series of strict laws and regulations to control those misbehaviors of individuals and enterprises who damage environment and deter the potential environment contaminators 利诱 financial incentives; tax-free/zero-tax policies/preferential—encourage people and companies to do their parts to xxxx. 教育stage/launch campaigns in communities to impart how to protect environment to those who lack the knowledge and skills related to environment protection and to raise the public’s awareness of environment protection `````````````` Generally speaking, environmental pollution and protection issues are now not always strange to human beings regardless of age, gender and wealth. While a voice is now becoming increasingly prevalent: individuals themselves are capable of addressing environmental issues, its skeptics consider that it is also advisable for enterprises and authorities to tackle environmental problems. To my knowledge, definitely speaking, the latter consideration is quite acceptable, due to xxx and xxx.---64
Initially, as to those who advocate the latter standpoint, large amounts of money and technologies could be allocated to and spent on crucial fields by enterprises, if they participate in the course of environmental protection. Environmental protection is a serious issue and does need different parties’ help to be resolved. Corporations, domestic and overseas; large and small, are usually not lack of money or high-level technology. This could benefit the protection and improvement of environment. However, the above mentioned can hardly be achieved by individuals and governments. ---87
Moreover, if governments do environmental protection, a multitude of environmental issues could be prevented by a large margin. This is mainly attributed to the undeniable fact that only these authorities could enact and implement a series of strict laws and regulations to punish those who pollute our planet and deter those potential environment damagers. --53
However, some people insist that the public are able to solve environmental problems by themselves. Environmentally friendly lifestyles can be taken, so as to do protect environment. To be specific, they can take public transports like buses and subway increasingly rather than drive cars frequently. Also, they can call upon their family members and friends to plant trees and clean up parks in spare time. –65
Overall, despite the ground held by the opposite, I still reaffirm my attitude that apart from individuals, governments and firms are also supposed to do their parts to protect our environment. In the long run, only by doing so can our earth become more suitable for human beings to live.---50 ``````